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Bradley Ramsey's avatar

Beautiful work here, Emilia! I love how immersive and beautiful the writing is, and the way you paired it with such genuine and authentic characters made this piece leap off the page.

Rafa Joseph's avatar

I love how Emilia reveals things using the most peculiar subjects and predicates, as in: "Collective noise rose as the foot traffic became frantic with the rain’s increasing pace." Once I start reading one of her sentences, just about anything could happen by the end... and the structure itself gives nothing away. 😉

This story feels like seeing the world for the very first time, a second time. Nothing is merely a thing; everything a sensation! Chase is ironically named, as he serves as a sort of quarry for Aiden's passionate pursuit. Reminds me of Richard Linklater's cult classic film *Before Sunrise*... only with bravado, homoeroticism and hematite rings.

If stories like this are merely the table-scraps, I can't wait to see what kind of narratological gems are cached within the deepest troves of Lovely's Lair! I'm sending in my level-18 paladin, to excavate.

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